Showing posts with label owning words. Show all posts
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Friday, July 5, 2019

Summertime Writing: Sherlock Holmes

For this post, I want to take a few old Sherlock Holmes sentences and work with them through sentence, meaning, and word study. This material will be based on material 100 years old.

Source Material
This is the first paragraph in the Adventures of Sherlock Holmes, Adventure I. Scandal in Bohemia


To Sherlock Holmes she is always the woman. I have seldom heard him mention her under any other name. In his eyes she eclipses and predominates the whole of her sex. It was not that he felt any emotion akin to love for Irene Adler. All emotions, and that one in particularly, were abhorrent to his cold, precise, but admirably balanced mind. He was, I take it, the most perfect reasoning and observing machine that the world has seen; but, as a lover, he would have placed himself in a false position. He never spoke of the softer passions, save with a gibe and a sneer. They were admirable things for the observer.

First of all, like almost all of Sherlock Holmes, the POV is Dr. John H. Watson—the narrator.

1. Kernel Sentences

Next, I'll list the kernel sentences.

She is the women.
I have seldom heard him mention her under any other name.
She eclipses her sex.
It wasn't that he felt love for Irene Adler.
All emotions were abhorrent to his mind.
He was the perfect reasoning and observing machine.
He would have placed himself in a false position.
He never spoke of the softer passion.
They were admirable things.

2. Word Dive

Then, I'll pick out certain words that I would like to look up and explore.

eclipse
\E*clipse"\, n. [F. ['e]clipse, L. eclipsis, fr. Gr. ?, prop., a forsaking, failing, fr. ? to leave out, forsake; ? out + ? to leave. See {Ex-}, and {Loan}.]
PIE - leikw; To leave.
Def. To obscure, darken, or extinguish the beauty, luster, honor, etc., of; to sully; to cloud; to throw into the shade by surpassing.
eclipse, n.: obscuration, darkness. [outshine].
eclipse, V. t: obscure, darken. 

predominate
\Pre*dom"i*nate\, v. i. [imp. & p. p. {Predominated}; p. pr. & vb. n. {Predominating}.] [Pref. pre- + dominate: cf. F. pr['e]dominer.] 
PIE - dem, House, household.
To be superior in number, strength, influence, or authority; to have controlling power or influence; to prevail; to rule; to have the mastery; as, love predominated in her heart.
\Pre*dom"i*nate\, v. t. To rule over; to overpower. [R.]
predominate, v. i.: control, pre-
predomination: control. 

sex
\Sex\, n. [L. sexus: cf. F. sexe.]
{The sex}, the female sex; women, in general.
sex, n. sexuality (rare), persuasion (jocular), gender (jocular).

seldom

\Sel"dom\, a.
Rare; infrequent. [Archaic.]
seldom: inf recently.


akin
\A*kin"\, a. [Pref. a- (for of) + kin.] 
1. Of the same kin; related by blood; -- used of persons; as, the two families are near akin. 
2. Allied by nature; partaking of the same properties; of the same kind. 
``A joy akin to rapture.'' --Cowper.

particularly
\Par*tic"u*lar*ly\, adv. 
1. In a particular manner; expressly; with a specific reference or interest; in particular; distinctly. 
2. In an especial manner; in a high degree; as, a particularly fortunate man; a particularly bad failure.
particular, a. 1. special, especial (equiv. of "special," but archaic in this sense), specific; spec, restricted; see definite.
Antonyms: see miscellaneous, general.

abhorrent
\Ab*hor"rent\, a. [L. abhorens, -rentis, p. pr. of abhorrere.] 
1. Abhorring; detesting; having or showing abhorrence; loathing; hence, strongly opposed to; as, abhorrent thoughts. 
The persons most abhorrent from blood and treason. --Burke. 
The arts of pleasure in despotic courts I spurn abhorrent. --Clover. 
2. Contrary or repugnant; discordant; inconsistent; -- followed by to. 
``Injudicious profanation, so abhorrent to our stricter principles.'' --Gibbon. 
3. Detestable. 
``Pride, abhorrent as it is.'' --I. Taylor.

admirably
\Ad"mi*ra*ble\, a. [L. admirabilis: cf. F. admirable.] 
1. Fitted to excite wonder; wonderful; marvelous. [Obs.]

gibe
\Gibe\, n. 
An expression of sarcastic scorn; a sarcastic jest; a scoff; a taunt; a sneer.

sneer
\Sneer\, n. 
1. The act of sneering. 
2. A smile, grin, or contortion of the face, indicative of contempt; an indirect expression or insinuation of contempt. 
''Who can refute a sneer?'' --Raley.
sneer: smile, laugh, jeer, snicker: laugh.
sneering: smiling, contemptuous.

Rewriting in my own way to interpret meaning

To Sherlock Holmes she is always the woman. I have rarely heard him mention her under any other name. In his eyes she diminishes and rules over other women. It wasn't that he felt any emotion similar to love for Irene Adler. All emotions, and that one in particular, were strongly opposed to his cold, precise, but wonderfully balanced mind. He was, I take it, the most perfect reasoning and observing machine that the world has seen; but, as a lover, he would have placed himself in a situation where he might act against his own principles or interests. He never spoke of romance, save with a sarcastic scorn, taunt, jest, and a sneer. Love interests were admirable things for the observer.

Sentence Imitation

To Sherlock Holmes she is always the woman.
To Frodo Baggins he is always the wizard.
To Harry Potter he is always the wizard.
To Harry Potter she is always the wizard.
To Robin Hood she is always the woman.
To Victor Frankenstein he is always the monster.

I have seldom heard him mention her under any other name.
I have seldom seen him look at her in any other way.
I have rarely seen him touch her in any other manner.
I have often heard her speak about him when she is in unpredictable moods—anger, jealousy, and even hatred.

In his eyes she eclipses and predominates the whole of her sex.
Under her watchful care, he eclipses and dominates all other men.
In her opinion in terms of writing ability, she is beyond and far superior to any other literature student.

It was not that he felt any emotion akin to love for Irene Adler. 
It wasn't that she felt emotion akin to disgust for Billy Bob.
It was not like he thought anything bad about Creed.

All emotions, and that one in particularly, were abhorrent to his cold, precise, but admirably balanced mind.
All opinions, and especially the ones coming from her, were unbelievable to his skeptical mind.

He was, I take it, the most perfect reasoning and observing machine that the world has seen; but, as a lover, he would have placed himself in a situation where he might act against his own principles or interests.
She was, in my view, the most beautiful woman that the world has ever seen; but, if he were her boyfriend, he would have placed him in a compromising love triangle situation.

He never spoke of romance, save with a sarcastic scorn, taunt, jest, and a sneer. 
She had never worked a job with him, save safely and distantly.

They were admirable things for the observer.
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Analysis of Writing Exercises

This was a fun exercise which I'm taking away a few new writing tools and ideas inspired from one of the great 19th and 20th century writers, Sir Arthur Conan Doyle.

“We balance probabilities and choose the most likely. It is the scientific use of the imagination.” — Sherlock Holmes

Monday, June 17, 2019

Summertime Writing: Making a Word Your Own

I ended up looking up half of the remaining words picked yesterday in about a half hour after finishing the post yesterday. The most significant word from those others was surface. Some thesaurus words for surface is face, exterior, covering, periphery, façade, or superficial. It can also be used as a verb to emerge, rise, or appear. I like the dual nature of the word and the multiple ways to use surface.

Continuing a summer Writing exercise series, I'm jumping over a couple of Spellbinding Sentences exercises that I believe I've already covered in the first three posts—one of them being reflecting on your practice, which I've done throughout the posts.

For this post I want to practice to make a few words my own. Besides learning the definition and thinking about what the words mean to a writer, the main way you "own" a word is by using them in sentences.

First I bring over a few information from the prior days. The three words that I focused on yesterday I'll try to use in sentences today. The Keith Duvall writing, inspired by the Kevin Durant NBA Warrior finals loss a few days ago that I wrote in the freewriting exercise, can serve as inspiration in writing these sentences. Some of the Word Mind: Word Frequency words that jump out at me, I'll maybe use as well—to either use, avoid, or alter.

Source Material

3 Focus words

symbol, captured, life

Freewriting Information

Keith Duvall a heroic, an African American former Union soldier who fought in the US Civil War.

After the war, Keith settled and built a cattle ranch in the expanding Western Frontier.
Several outlaws had ravaged the area in recent days and made off with several head of cattle.
a western gunfighter situation.

Word Frequency
his ranch 
shouted to 
ranch hands 
the bandits, outlaws
his rifle
his cattle 
war
barn
bullets 
soldier 
hands

I had only heard about African Americans fighting in the American Civil War.

Here is a link to a History Channel short video
Black Civil War Soldiers

Symbol


Yin and Yang


I've already mentioned Yin Yang symbol.

Keith Duvall has only seen the Yin and Yang symbol once in a newspaper article, though he doesn't know what it is called though. 

"It looks like two tadpoles trying to chase each other," he said a slight deep chuckle made him shake a little.

In those two paragraphs, besides trying to use the word symbol, I was trying to use my own selected symbol through the eyes of my fiction character Keith Duvall. I figured he might have only seen the symbol in a newspaper—the main form of news media for that time period. The first way that I though I might be able to reveal his opinion was through dialogue to someone. I don't know who he was talking to or with. His opinion however is that the image is a little humorous. That reveals a little of his personality, which differs from my own. I think it is a cool image. Keith Duvall can only relate to tadpoles which maybe he saw or collected in some pond as a child. Collecting or playing with tadpoles was probably fun and made him giggle as a child. I've actually collected tadpoles as a child and it was fun as well. That is probably why I used those memories as Keith's opinion of Yin and Yang symbol.

Captured

For captured, I'll just use the tadpole incident. I quickly research when mason jars were invented—just before the American Civil War. Perfect!

I'll also bring in a sidekick friend, David.

"Got em!" Davy said his breathing was fast and erratic.

Keefy looked over to see what Davy had found.

What Davy held in the mason jar high above his head was dirty pond water with two large captured tadpoles swimming about. He watched them swim about. At one moment, the two started to chase each other like a whirlpool circling around.

Keefy's eyes went large and his mouth opened round and large.

One of them broke out from this chase and wiggle  down to the bottom.

Keefy smiled and then chuckled.

"I'm going to chase you like a tadpole, " he warned Davy.

Davy's head went side to side, his missing tooth grinned. "Not if you can't catch me," he said. 

He took off running. Davy followed in pursuit.

That was a longer passage that I just wrote. When writing, I first thought that Keith and David probably would go by nicknames at this younger age. All of this writing was first to use the word captured in a sentence, "...two large captured tadpoles..." I also wanted to develop the Keith character and begin to develop a David character. This also serves as background material possibly for a flashback, first chapter, or prologue. This experience can also somewhat mirror how Keith would later chase or go after the bandit outlaws.

Life

To me, freedom during that period was a life worth fighting for.

In giving freedom to the slave, we assure freedom to the free -- honorable alike in what we give, and what we preserve. We shall nobly save, or meanly lose, the last best, hope of earth.
--December 1, 1862 Message to Congress

Keith looked across the battlefield.

He then looked to the clearing sky

"The best life we can have is fighting for the freedom and right to have our own possessions," Davy said, his voice steady and felt some tightness in his arms and neck.

Davy looked off into the corpse littered battlefield. He took in a deep breath, held it, and then slowly released it. 

He turned back to Keith, adjusting his gun back slightly. "What do you want to do... if we make it through this craziness?"

"Cows. I'd like to have me a big-old ranch full of some cows." 

"Moo," Davy said. "Keefy's going live the life of a cattle rancher."

I set this in the Civil War. I'm not sure where this is or what specific battlefield. I used life twice in this passage. I also brought in the idea of getting his own cattle ranch. I was a little torn about either having the sky clearing or darkening. I could have done either. How the story goes, I might change that image to use as a foreshadowing or thematic imagery.

Summary

All of these writing exercises have been beneficial. I do feel a different appreciating for these three words. symbol, captured, and life feel more like my words now.