Learning about Poetry (part 11): distant Conceptional to more touchable, Tangible

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Based on the prior day\s poetic lines, in this exercise, I’ll try to fish out a few more abstract—but seemingly important—and add on or replace the words with more tangible groups of words.

To make things more brief, let's just focus on three sentences.

1. Sanctuary.

There outside my sanctuary, covered by showering-mist rainy, wet dusk.

secured sanctuary, my house,

There outside my secured sanctuary, my house, covered by showering-mist rainy, wet dusk.

2. Hurt

Hurt and lusk,

unmoving, sunken deep,

almost under, on a reclining sofa.

Wound bleeding-broken bone-hurt

Wound bleeding, broken bone—hurt and lusk,

unmoving, sunken deep

almost under, on a reclining sofa.

Don’t touch.

3. Far

Gone far from my familiarity,

away from my home by final, unstoppable dusk.

eight hundred miles

Gone eight hundred miles from my familiarity,

away from my home,

divided by final, unstoppable dusk.

That was fun. In the next poetry post, I think I might want to focus on figurative language.